I like that second line. I wonder if something like "half-dozing" would work in line 1.
Thanks for visiting & commenting, Bill. I'll give your suggestion for line 1 some thought...
like the sleepy mood; even just "dozing" can work for L1much love...
how beautiful that awkward state of awakening, wow
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There's a fly like that here trying to wake up for Spring - alas still a foot of snow...much enjoyed Frank.
No snow here fortunately, but the rest of the UK has had quite lot - not very spring-like at the moment! Pleased to see that your are posting again. Thanks for visiting & commenting, Janice...
a butterfly to trust the changing winds chance
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dozing for L1 or half-asleep?A spring feeling, but not here in a good part of the US.Adelaide
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I like that second line. I wonder if something like "half-dozing" would work in line 1.
Thanks for visiting & commenting, Bill. I'll give your suggestion for line 1 some thought...
like the sleepy mood; even just "dozing" can work for L1
much love...
how beautiful that awkward state of awakening, wow
Thanks for visiting & commenting, Gillena...
Thanks for visiting & commenting, Lorraine...
There's a fly like that here trying to wake up for Spring - alas still a foot of snow...much enjoyed Frank.
No snow here fortunately, but the rest of the UK has had quite lot - not very spring-like at the moment! Pleased to see that your are posting again. Thanks for visiting & commenting, Janice...
a butterfly
to trust the changing winds
chance
Thanks for visiting & your lovely haiku, Magyar...
dozing for L1 or half-asleep?
A spring feeling, but not here in a good part of the US.
Adelaide
Thanks for visiting & commenting, Adelaide...
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