Lazy current was a fine usage...just as we let the present pass, lazing :)Fine haiku, Frank, wishes, devika
Gosh I love the image...so moody, so what I love :)
despite the lazy current, i like the fluid motion of the poem, good one...
I'm going to take "riding" as covering all three of the items that precede it. That is, the bird song, too, is riding the current. Don't know if that's what you intended, but it works for me, and, As Robert Frost said, "A poet is entitled to anything the reader finds in his poem."
Love it!Those first two lines really spark off it each other to create a new poem.Wonderful images, thank you!Another lazy poem ;-)lazy afternoon-I drift along with the breezeand dandelion seedsAlan Summers1. 'Haiku Friends 2' ed. Masaharu Hirata, Osaka, Japan 20072. Aesthetics, Bath Spa University literary journal, Summer 20073. Creative Writing Bath ekphrastic exerciseall my best,AlanAlan’s Area 17 blog.
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