Thanks Dalloway for your comments and suggestion for condensing my haiku. I'm going to adopt your shortened first line. In my opinion, the word black engenders a feeling of foreboding that most of us feel at the beginning of the workweek. Thanks once again...
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"a chill blue sky"... a perfect line
actually, I may have shortened this haiku to something like:
a new week...
seagulls circle
a chill blue sky
ovely words, a great image
Thanks Dalloway for your comments and suggestion for condensing my haiku. I'm going to adopt your shortened first line. In my opinion, the word black engenders a feeling of foreboding that most of us feel at the beginning of the workweek. Thanks once again...
ah! I thought I might have been missing something... I hope next Monday is easier for you. Dal
I can see you words, I like that, very much!
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